Hello Everyone,
Here is about a minute into my piece until the end. I am aware that the final section still needs some timing clarifications and that I need to open up my dancers a little more.
Location: Lehman Park
Costume: Same as "Chapter One..."
https://drive.google.com/file/d/196HTSVPBbXszEcnMUUc40OLEcmSIiJn9/view?usp=sharing
1.) I heard that you started filming, and it went well.
2.) I am concerned with your movement vocabulary. It is like familiar phrases put together but switching to different languages. With this combination, the logic simply isn't there. It also demonstrates movement like exercise rather than an art form, because the movement and piece lack cohesion. In other words, the piece goes from one movement idea to the next with no bridge that allows the viewer to know how you got there.
3.) As I mentioned before, if a movement has a name like pas de bourrée or Charleston step, kick it out or change, adapt, vary it to make it "uniquely" yours. That element alone will give cohesion to the piece.
Keep working on the choreography. Even playful movement can be unique without using "dance studio stock" movement.